SWA #21

Student Document 2: "The Age of Information: Advantages for All, or Just a Bust?" Response Questions

What is the issue?
The issue is that our generation has gone from having minimal interaction with technology to being engulfed in a world that is ran by technology. The author states that there are some very negative things that come out of the constant social networking that today's society partakes in.

Is the importance explained?
The importance is stated in the conclusion. The writer states that the internet and social media are being overused so much and are causing our generation to develop issues such as ADD and OCD. This is important because it affects how this generation will perform in the future in college and in the workforce.

Are the four distinct perspectives easily identifiable?
Yes, they are stated in the introduction.

What are they?
1. university professors and school officials
2. parents of students and young adults using the technologies
3. the students and young people themselves
4. the makers, marketers, and producers of such gadgets

Is the thesis informative and concise?
yes

Do the introduction and conclusion offer effective leads to and out of the argument, how do you know this?
Yes, the introduction properly introduces the argument by stating the distinct perspectives and the issue at hand. The conclusion empolys a quote to offer a different view on the argument, which can lead to further discussion.

Is the essay effective? Explain?
This essay is effective because it speaks of a real issue in today's society. The essay begins in a catchy way, that will make the argument more receptive to readers. The essay provides clear examples and quotes from outside texts to back up the author's claim. The author makes the essay effective by clearly and fully reaching the goal of explaining the thesis statement.

What would you have suggested to the student writer if you had been partnered for peer review?
As a peer reviewer, I would have suggested that the student consider changing some of their grammar issues and check again for spelling errors. I would have also suggested that the author needed to more blatantly explain the issue in the introduction.